CARROT
OBSESSION
We
all have a favorite vegetable, but Tanners fathers carrot obsession is
like no other normal obsession. These
are the reasons why. He keeps all of the
carrots in a steel cage, if Tanner eats one carrot his dad would get all tearful. Those were just a couple of reasons, but the
one thing that gets on Tanners nerves is when his dad puts the carrots to bed. He puts mauve blankets on the carrots
and a mattress under them, he treats carrots like they are his kids.
There are more things I can talk about but there is no point. You already heard the worst.
Nice story
ReplyDelete-but you should put a coma after he keeps his carrots in a steel cage
-take out the coma after if i even eat one carrot
Okay thanks
DeleteThis carrot obsession is an interesting idea and we are curious as to how you came up with it, just remember to check your punctuation (review where you used the commas). Overall an interesting piece of writing and we are curious as to what else Tanner's dad could do with carrots.
ReplyDeletei will do that
Deletenice story but you do not need a comma after the word /nerves/ in the 5th sentence. Also you should separate your story into paragraphs. and indent. also I love your very creative idea.
ReplyDeletethanks
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