Tuesday 17 January 2017

                                  A BAD DAY IN LOS SANTOS



            It was a sunny day in Los Santos, a family was going to Vespucci beach.     
         “Why can’t we just stay home?” shouted Jimmy.
                                                                                                                              “We can’t stay home because we need to spend more family time, you always play video games.” said Michael.

                                                                     

        They arrived at the beach.  Michael and Amanda found a table to eat lunch.  After eating, they went for a swim.  As the weather changed, they quickly got out of the water and dried themselves off because it had started to rain.  Michael was disappointed, Jimmy was happy because he could play his video games again.  
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3 comments:

  1. Scarface18 January 2017 at 09:29

    You forgot to indent for the second and third paragraph

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  2. HarryPotter18 January 2017 at 10:07

    your firsts sentence should be like this, " it was a sunny dat in Los Santos, a family was going to Vespucci beach."

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  3. Annabeth19 January 2017 at 08:35

    Your sentence, After a two hour drive they got to the beach. You should have written, they arrived at the beach.

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