Autopsy I had a basement which was a lab and was
legal. I solved cases that doctors or people could not solve. On one rainy day,
the sheriff brought a body to my lab. When I examined the body there was not
even a single cut or blood on the body.
So I thought she ate some pills and killed herself but the sheriff, said,
“We found her buried.”
After
he left, cut open the body and I peeled off the skin. I saw a ritual tattooed inside her body,
while looking at it, suddenly the lights went out. She was a demon.
-I had a basement, which was a legal lab. I think this sentence makes more sense then. I had a basement which was a lab and was legal.
ReplyDelete-I think you should change your 2nd sentence to this; I solved cases that doctors or people could not solve.
-3rd sentence you need a comma after the word sheriff.
-After he left, I cut open the body and (you don't need I) peeled off (you wrote of but its actually off) the skin.
-But I like your story. Good job.
thx
Deletevery nice story..
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