Tuesday 28 February 2017

                                          Autopsy                                                                                                  I had a basement which was a lab and was legal.  I solved cases that doctors or people could not solve.  On one rainy day, the sheriff brought a body to my lab. When I examined the body there was not even a single cut or blood on the body.  So I thought she ate some pills and killed herself but the sheriff, said, “We found her buried.”

After he left,  cut open the body and I peeled off the skin.  I saw a ritual tattooed inside her body, while looking at it, suddenly the lights went out.  She was a demon.            


3 comments:

  1. -I had a basement, which was a legal lab. I think this sentence makes more sense then. I had a basement which was a lab and was legal.
    -I think you should change your 2nd sentence to this; I solved cases that doctors or people could not solve.
    -3rd sentence you need a comma after the word sheriff.
    -After he left, I cut open the body and (you don't need I) peeled off (you wrote of but its actually off) the skin.
    -But I like your story. Good job.

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